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A group emerged from
the sea surface moved ahead piercing through the thick foliage and pristine sea,
footing beneath them. They marched towards her in a unified manner neither hastily
nor leisurely. With the glint of the full moon on a gloomy night, it was quite a view
from the distance. Priya’s eyes scanned through the mass and spotted Nach with a lantern. She saw a few one-eyed tiny creatures and three-eyed gargantuan
creatures taking their strides to the fore flanking along Nach, Chi Chi, Deb
and others who welcomed her. Besides their eyes and size, the creatures looked
alike with a sphere-shaped body with upper limbs and lower limbs protruding
out; elongated neck connecting the oval-shaped face that has glossy eyes and pointed nose. The slender and thread like hairs
(aka) tentacles were glistening like a star, which she realized was the reason
behind the pack's illumination.
The group looked
flawless even from a distance as the creatures were lined based on their height.
Their glowing tentacles assisted her to get a clear picture of their faces.
Impressed by their
ravishing display of unison that was shored up by the incredible blue-green
patch, Priya grinned with zeal seemingly ignoring all the unanswered questions
running inside her head. She did not even move a feet after witnessing this
splendor.
As she was
enjoying the sight, she was dumbstruck by a peculiar movement created within
the group. The tiny creatures at the front row of the pack carved-off from the
central point creating an incision at five meter radius dividing the group into
two for a moment. Each of the tiny creatures who carved-off joined together after
taking a semi-circular path along the radius. The rest of the pack literally
followed the row ahead of them and created a circular space at the heart of the
group. Priya looked suitably awed watching such a brilliant act that she has
never witnessed anywhere before.
The circular
space travelled along the group from inside until a bunch of human beings
occupied it from nowhere. Priya gasped in astonishment to see the people
of her gene amongst these creatures. What was more baffling was to
spot her mother in the middle of the group.
She took a mad dash towards the pack, pushing herself
out of the palace. As she approached the pack, they opened with the same
semi-circular movement, creating a way for her to get inside the pack.
Picking up the pace after watching her mother in proximal
distance, she screamed
Maaa!
After nearing her mother, Priya looked into her eyes
and said, I missed you maa before embracing
her. To her dismay, instead of feeling the warmth of her mother she felt cold.
She stood erect watching her mother's diminishing figure into the thin current of air. Tears started flowing down her eyes.
Here are the links for rest of this story
Chapter 6 I Chapter 7 I Chapter 8 I Chapter 9 I Chapter 10 I Chapter 11 I Chapter 12 I Chapter 13
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Chapter 5 - The View of the Unknown
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Good one and little horror..is that a dedication for children who are missing moms?
ReplyDeleteOf course it is. I got this comment from many people and its very much motivating that my words got into their mind.
DeleteThe story ends with an anticipation, that is the very quality of a successful story that needs to be continued. Loved the narration as well..:-)
ReplyDeleteBest of luck with the contest... :-)
Thanks a ton Maniparna for your generous comment.
DeleteA well narrated piece of story!! Good work. Keep going!!!
ReplyDeleteGlad you liked it Maha. Thank you.
DeleteVery well written! And the concept of continuing the story by a different blogger is amazing. It takes skill to carry forward the momentum :)
ReplyDeleteVery well written! And the concept of continuing the story by a different blogger is amazing. It takes skill to carry forward the momentum :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Jane for the compliments.
DeleteVey well done GR! Sorry I got to it so late because I was traveling for the past few days! Good luck buddy! :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Archana. No problem at all.
DeleteVery interesting and horror narrations super. I also got it late. I like the way of handling and passing to next hand. Congrats.
ReplyDeleteGlad you liked it. I guess everyone have done a great job.Thanks for the comment.
DeleteLoved the twist!
ReplyDeleteThanks for the compliments Kavipriya :-)
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