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My Valentine story...

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"You don't love me anymore, you are a complete mess," she exploded.

"Yes, very well and thanks for reminding me ," I yelled back and banged the door shut.

Infuriatingly, I took my steps on the streets, without knowing where I was heading to. I was unexpectedly interrupted by a sweet chirping hum composed by a pair of little Magpie Robins, who seem to have a great romantic time over the branches.

It took me back to the wonderful and dreamy college days and smelled the serenity of love that cruised between us.

I ran back, took a bow and said, "Will you be my valentine forever?"
My Valentine story... My Valentine story... Reviewed by Gowthama Rajavelu on 22:40 Rating: 5

11 comments:

  1. Vinay Nagaraju13 February 2015 at 15:01

    I like the usage of words Gowthama. I think it would have been nicer if the story was longer. I was drawn into it and was expecting more :).. just a thought, I might as well be very wrong :)

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    1. Gowthama Rajavelu14 February 2015 at 20:35

      Idea is to convey a story within 100 words Vinay. I don't know whether it came out well. However, I value you opinion and will come up with an elongated version soon ;-)

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    2. Vinay Nagaraju14 February 2015 at 22:47

      Thanks mate.. That was just a thought, I wasn;t aware of the 100 word limitation. I am kinda inclined to read longer stories and used to writing longer comments as you can see :D :D .. He he :D ..

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    3. Gowthama Rajavelu16 February 2015 at 12:10

      Yeah I can very well see that :-D Even I like reading and writing longer articles, just thought of writing a shorter version. Really challenging!

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  2. Ravish Mani16 February 2015 at 13:51

    Cute story.. loved the emotions & memory of college days :)

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    1. Gowthama Rajavelu17 February 2015 at 12:47

      Thank you Ravish for comment. Writing stories with word restriction is fun and challenging. Will come up with more such stories. Keep visiting. Hope you like it :) ;)

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  3. Rohan18 February 2015 at 17:38

    Hi Gowthama,

    Nice write up in just 100 words. Well written. And as usual, you expressed the story very nicely. :)

    Have a great day!
    - Rohan Chaubey.

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  4. Gowthama Rajavelu19 February 2015 at 14:22

    Thank you Rohan for a pleasing comment. Will come up with lot such stories :-)

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  5. Mridula24 February 2015 at 13:09

    And then they fought over dishes ever after? :D That is just wicked me who reacts like this to V Day stories!

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    1. Gowthama Rajavelu25 February 2015 at 11:09

      Sounds like a perfect ending for the story Mridula. Cool :-)

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  6. Ana Karla19 March 2016 at 18:07

    que lindoo!
    www.byanak.com.br

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